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The Synopsis: What is It? 11/4/04

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Thu Nov 04 19:03:47 2004

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mary rosenblum

Hello all!

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I hope you've had a good week!

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This is our After Hours Forum, with me, Mary Rosenblum, your web editor. I've published seven novels and more than 60 short stories and will do my best to answer any questions you have. If you're new here, remember that you need to click on the 'Ask a Question' button or the 'word bubble' next to the red question mark at the top of the screen in order to ask a question. Your regular 'send' bar won't reach me! Or you can use /ask and type your question into the regular send bar if that works better for you..

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We're doing our After Hours early this week, because I'll be appearing on panels...

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at a local writers conference all weekend, starting tomorrow afternoon.

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And I'm doing a section of their writers workshop...which sparked this particular topic.

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I have several submissions of novel first chapters and a synopsis.

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And the synopses are so totally inappropriate for submission to an agent or editor...

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that I thought I had better address this topic.

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And...just as a personal bit of PR...

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I'm announcing that my website is finally up and active, if not entirely complete yet.

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it's at www.maryrosenblum.com and please do visit. I keep the schedule updated and there will be quite a bit more there, soon.

deb1234

Please share your URL and...did you sell your novel yet?

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you can just type www.maryrosenblum.com into your browser deb.,

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My SF novel is out for bid at TWO publishers...they both have it and they each know the other has it so wish me luck!

wolf122

I've seen the site--it looks great so far! I love the colorful background you chose.

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Thanks, Wolf! That's the cover of my hardcover collection of short fiction...

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It's a Bob Eggleston painting...he's one of the top illustrators in the field.

mary rosenblum

This is our After Hours Forum, with me, Mary Rosenblum, your web editor. I've published seven novels and more than 60 short stories and will do my best to answer any questions you have. If you're new here, remember that you need to click on the 'Ask a Question' button or the 'word bubble' next to the red question mark at the top of the screen in order to ask a question. Your regular 'send' bar won't reach me! Or you can use /ask and type your question into the regular send bar if that works better for you..

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So let's talk about the synopsis.

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This is what you are going to send to your prospective agent or editor along with probably three chapters.

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If they don't specify the number in the guidelines, three is pretty standard.

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And yes, you usually want the first three.

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If you find yourself saying...'but the really good part is in chapter four...

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then maybe you need to think about starting with chapter four and using flashback and other techniques to fill in those first three chapters worth of information.

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What does your synopsis do?

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Well, if the editor likes your first three chapters, thinks you write well, the characterization is strong and you've hooked your reader...

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he/she wants to know if you've written a novel that will interest readers.

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Is it a Harry Potter or Tolkien clone?

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Is it trite? Is it monotonous with no dramatic arc to speak of?

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Does it reach a powerful climax and an exciting resolution?

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Will the ending satisfy the readers?

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Is it too long for the number of pages the publisher will accept?

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Is it too thin a plot?

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These are all questions that your editor or agent wants to answer as he/she reads your synopsis.

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And of course, you want to hold that editor or agent's attention...

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so when the secretary calls on the intercom to say a client is on the phone..

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that agent/editor tells her to put that person on hold or call back later.

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So you want to write it in such a way that the synopsis itself is an exciting read.

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You REALLY need to work on your synopsis.

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It WILL sell your novel...or not.

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Now I can write a sloppier synopsis than you can.

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My editor can look at the books I've published and my award history...she can say..

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okay, she knows what she's doing, this has some holes in it but she can fill them in....

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But that editor doesn't know you, the unpublished novelist (and no, short stories don't count...BIG gap in technique there).

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So if she sees holes in a first novelist's synopsis and it's not something she thinks marketing will jump for...

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she'll reject it.

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And maybe the holes aren't really holes, you just dashed off this synopsis.

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Remember. The editor/agent has a stack of submissions that could choke a very hungry elephant.

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If yours isn't great, there are at least five in that huge pile that ARE.

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So give your synopsis to readers...quizz 'em after. What is the book about? If they don't get all that should be there, work on it some more.

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So just what IS a synopsis and how do you format it?

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Well, read book jacket blurbs for awhile.

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Really.

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Go to your local bookstore, grab some paperbacks from the rack in your genre and read.

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Usually there is a paragraph on the back that sort of 'teases' the reader...

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This is the tone you want in your synopsis...sort of like a movie trailer.

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This is not your working outline or a chapter summary to help you through the first draft.

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This is a 'trailer' designed to interest that agent and editor.

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Practice a lot.

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Every time you read a story, write a blurb for it.

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Every time you write a story, write a blurb for it.

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That's an exercise I give my workshop participants when I do a writers workshop.

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You use PRESENT tense, even if your novel is in past, which is most likely is.

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You write with that excited, 'Hollywood' voice.

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You don't EVER backtrack. Start with the first plot event and move forward only. No 'Oh yes, and back when...' type insertions.

happybunny

Mary, those paragraphs on the back of the book don't tell readers how the book ends. But we are supposed to do so in our synopsis to an editor or agent, is that right?

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Well, you are not doing a blurb, you are doing a synopsis, happy.

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The blurb IS a teaser.

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And while you want that TONE of that blurb, you must include the entire plot for the editor/agent and of course the ending.

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They have to know what the entire dramatic arc looks like and know that you can indeed end a novel. Many wannabes can't!

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A blurb is just a couple of paragraphs. You are going to write up to five pages...

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more if you have a very complex plot, but no more than ten and less is better.

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Now I"m talking single space here, not doublt.

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You don't have to use manuscript format. The editor isn't going to edit this...just read it.

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Use letter format...skip a line between paragraphs to make it easier to read...

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Use present tense, a lot of energy.

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Skip the small details. Stick to the plot high points and the key events of your subplots.

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Remember that if your editor or agent's attention wanders, you'll probably get the rejection slip so work at keeping the reader glued to the page.

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Start with a strong hook opening.

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When Saul D'Artagnan, fraud expert and Olympic fencer discovers the body of his friend and client, all h#ll breaks loose...

happybunny

A couple of markets that I have been looking at in "Writer's Market" say to submit a one page synopsis and the first three chapters. Do different editors want different lengths or is there a standard length for a synopsis?

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They often want different lengths, happy.

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If they ask for a specific length in the guidelines, use it.

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If there is no stated length, try for five pages max. If the plot sounds good and you write strongly and succintly, the editor or agent will ask to see the entire ms.

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A one page synopsis is basically a request for the core plot idea.

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You can't go into subplots or tell us about more than your main character or caharacters.

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If they don't specify the number of chapters to send, send the first three.

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You won't get rejected if your synopsis is a bit longer than the specified length, generally...but a 20 page synopsis when they asked for three sure will.

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Get you rejected, that is. :-)

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It often helps to sit down and list your major plot points before you start...

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rather than writing off the cuff.

speckledorf

When writing a synopsis, is going chapter by chapter hitting the highlights a good idea?

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No, it's not, speck.

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That is a BORING read.

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Not every chapter will have an equally steep dramatic arc.

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You are much better off to go from plot point to plot point, skipping whole sections if nothing much happens...

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other than character interactions or subplot activities.

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You want something that reads like that bookjacket blurb..

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an integrated whole, not a laundry list.

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What you want is a story...told and not shown...that makes the editor want to read it in detail.

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You are answering the question: What is your novel about?

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Only when you ask writers this in real life...

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all too often you get this meandering account of this, then that, then, oh yes, I forgot...this...

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Don't do that.

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Start with the hook. Now what happens to our main characters? Then what? Now what do they face? How do they escape and what happens next?

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This is the kind of progression you have...

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and leave the back story to a minimum!

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Remember...your editor can read all about that in the complete ms.

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Just include enough that the main plot makes sense.

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If the information isn't vital to understanding that main plot, leave it out.

stina

what if you're weaving together multiple plot lines?

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Then you have to skip back and forth between them...and remember, stina...

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too many main plot lines weakens your whole story.

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two is pretty reasonable. More than two and it is VERY difficult to engage the reader with them.

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You just alternate with your description of what is going on.

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Brand storms the castle with his rag-tag bunch of rebels. Meanwhile, Serai is lost in the Sea Caves, searching desperately for the Jewel of Knowlege. She finds it between the feet...

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of a sea dragon and because of her kinship to sky dragons...

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is able to talk the sea dragon into lending it to her. It even carries her back to the castle's shore...

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but when she arrives, she finds the castle still unbreached and the fields strewn with dead rebels. A dying rebel tells her that Brand has been captured...

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then you go to what is happening to Brand...

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This is our After Hours Forum, with me, Mary Rosenblum, your web editor. I've published seven novels and more than 60 short stories and will do my best to answer any questions you have. If you're new here, remember that you need to click on the 'Ask a Question' button or the 'word bubble' next to the red question mark at the top of the screen in order to ask a question. Your regular 'send' bar won't reach me! Or you can use /ask and type your question into the regular send bar if that works better for you..

speckledorf

How much info on our characters do we include?

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Just enough to make that character interesting to the editor...

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he/she can read more later! :-) Pick out the characteristics that make your character unique...

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and interesting to the reader.

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He's an Olympic fencer. She's a lion tamer. Whatever.

roe

Mary,Is the synopsis the same as what f a proposal would be for non fiction

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Not at all, roe.

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Not at all, roe.

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Fiction and nonfiction proposals/synopses are not at all alike.

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Really and truely I am not an expert on NF book length proposals.

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I've never done one, but they are much more formal and content oriented, including proposed index and the like.

stina

is this a seperate document from the query letter?

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Absolutely, Stina.

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Your query letter tells the editor what credits you have...published work, expertise that bears on this particular novel...

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and tells that editor/agent that the synopsis and chapters are enclosed.

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Now if the guidelines say query first, as opposed to query with synopsis and chapters...

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then you simply shorten your synopsis to that one or two paragraph bookjacket blurb...

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and include that.

happybunny

Mary, could you give us a brief example? Maybe for something that everyone knows, like "The Wizard of Oz?"

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Yes, let's do the query letter version.

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I'm not going to attempt five pages here!

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But I'll post an article on the synopsis later with a real example.

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We're querying an agent about this cool new novel we've written.

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Trapped in the gray, dusty plains of Kansas, Dorothy longs for a colorful world beyond th rainbow. But when she has to run away to save her beloved dog, she is snatched up by a tornado and whisked away to that magical land beyond the rainbow.

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There, persecuted and pursued by an evil witch, she meets a host of wonderful and strange new friends, who help her on her way to the magical city of Oz.

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Surely the Great Wizard will send her home to Aunty Em! But when he sends her off to confront the evil witch, all seems lost. Dorothy is captured and her friends are driven off. But through their courage and deep bond of friendship...

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they triumph over the evil witch and return successful to Oz.

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There, Dorothy discovers that she alone has the ability to return home and does so, filled with a deep new..

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appreciation for the family who loves her.

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That's pretty rough, but that's the idea.

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I'd probably slip in a few really vivid details, but it wouldn't be much longer for a query.

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For a synopsis...

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say five pages...

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I'd hit the high points of Dorothy's journey...her meeting with the tin man, the lion, the scarecrow and a few of their adventures more specifically.

info

so you would pretty much want to leave out the little details like her friends being a lion, scarecrow, tinman and so on. Right

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Probably...for the query.

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You only have a page for a query letter, so it is really the story idea rather than the story as a whole.

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They'd go into the synopsis though.

happybunny

Thanks! That was great. So it is not necessary to say HOW she killed the witch or HOW she got back home, only that she was able to do both??

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Right. Even in the synopsis you probably wouldn't bother to tell us how she killed the witch..

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don't forget you covering a whole novel in five pages!

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You pick out the details that are most interesting and most necessary to understanding how the story will work.

jac

It's the very abridged version as opposed to a description?

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Yes...the synopsis is the 'abridged' version of the novel, all tell don't show...

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and the query is the abridged version of the synopsis, hitting only the very central main plot points.

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This is our After Hours Forum, with me, Mary Rosenblum, your web editor. I've published seven novels and more than 60 short stories and will do my best to answer any questions you have. If you're new here, remember that you need to click on the 'Ask a Question' button or the 'word bubble' next to the red question mark at the top of the screen in order to ask a question. Your regular 'send' bar won't reach me! Or you can use /ask and type your question into the regular send bar if that works better for you..

roe

I guess what I meant was does it take the place of a proposal or do we have to write a separate proposal

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Semantics are confusing, roe.

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In fiction, a 'proposal' is what I just demonstrated for the query letter...

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that's what that is... a proposal.

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I can write this story -- no details yet.

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In nonfiction, a proposal is more complete...like a synopsis in fiction.

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Confused yet?

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As an unpublished novelist, don't worry about proposals.

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You are going to have to sell the complete novel.

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Because an editor has NO proof that you can finish a novel...

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so will wait until you do to offer on it.

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Once you have proven your ability to finish a novel on deadline...

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you can sell a proposal.

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When I sold my mysteries, all four of them were purchased as proposals only.

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I wrote the actual novel after I had sold it.

speckledorf

Okay....do I need a proposal for fiction or do I just query?

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Unless the guidelines prohibit you from sending more than a query letter, speck, I would send the agent/editor the synopsis and three chapters.

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You are more likely to catch that person's attention.

mary rosenblum

This is our After Hours Forum, with me, Mary Rosenblum, your web editor. I've published seven novels and more than 60 short stories and will do my best to answer any questions you have. If you're new here, remember that you need to click on the 'Ask a Question' button or the 'word bubble' next to the red question mark at the top of the screen in order to ask a question. Your regular 'send' bar won't reach me! Or you can use /ask and type your question into the regular send bar if that works better for you..

stina

so... for the longer example, could you do "a game of thrones" by g.r.r. martin? :)

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I can't really do a five page example here, stina. :-) I'll post an example online.

speckledorf

If the guidelines say either query or send synopsis and sample chapters, which I send? Does one have an advantage over the other?

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Absolutely. Send the synopsis and chapters.

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Very few people do better at a query than they do with the actual writing.

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If your query isn't all that hot, you'll get a rejection.

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But if your editor starts reading page one and is hooked...

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you might sell that book even if your query would not have done so.

gail

A synopsis is to fiction novels as a proposal is to non-fiction. Am I understanding this correctly?

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Relatively speaking, gail. But they are very different in form.

happybunny

If I send a synopsis and three chapters, is it best to keep the cover letter to a minimum? Just give genre, word count, brief bio, and say that a synopsis and three chapters are enclosed?

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That's really all you need, happy. The synopsis and chapters will sell themselves.

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And don't overlook your own expertise.

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If you're sending in a mystery set in a zoo and you were a zoo keeper for years, SAY so!

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That makes the marketing department prick up their ears.

wolf122

How different should the hook for the synopsis be compared to the hook for the book?

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Well, it should be stronger than most novel openings, wolf.

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Novels often start with what I call a 'baseline' rather than leaping into the middle of events as short stories tend to do.

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It's perfectly fine in novels to begin before your plot actually starts and sort of set up the world and the main characters...

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just make it interesting.

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So if you have done this, start wiht the first dramatic plot hook.

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If you satr

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If you start with a bang, then go ahead and use your start.

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For a mystery, you might start with the murder.

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When Sarah Goldman discovers the body of the mayor in her trailer, the nightmare begins...

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And in the book, she might not find that body until the last paragraph of chapter one.

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But that is the plot hook, so we'll use it to begin the synopsis.

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What I see most often in novice synopses...

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is the writer's effort to get all the details in. And thus we lose any sense of drama...it drowns in a sea of details.

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We don't need to know everything...just the basic points of the dramatic arc.

happybunny

In a nonfiction proposal the editors usually want things like how does your book compare to others on the market and a statement about why you think this book will appeal to your target audience. Are things like this ever included in a fiction synopsis, query, or cover letter?

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Oh by all means do that if you've got some strong comparisons.

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It's not necessary, but if you're a novice, anything you can say to increase someone's interest in your book is good.

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Dinosaur Summer picks up where Jurassic Park left off...

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and go on to explain why Dinosaur summer will do the Jurassic Park thing even better. :-)

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Now I'm not suggesting that you would use the world of Jurassic Park for your Dinosaur Summer book...

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but that book would do something that worked well for Jurassic Park and do it better.

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Do realize that all characters and worlds created by other writers are closed to you unless you obtain written permission.

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Even posting 'fan fic' on the internet can get you in trouble.

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I know a few fans who have collected 'cease and desist' letters from lawyers for posting fiction set in an author's world...

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although most authors I know really don't mind it. :-)

stina

will putting in a tiny plot synopsis in the query letter be necessary if you're sending a synopsis?

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Nope. It's right there in front of the editor or agent, stina. Smack under that letter he's reading. :-)

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He's going to look at it at least and if you grab him with your first paragraph...

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she'll keep reading.

happybunny

All characters are off limits? Surely not typical things like dwarves or fairies? Do you mean named characters only?

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Yes, named characters only, unless they are unique to that author's world, happy.

happybunny

So no ents, then :-)

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that's right. :-) Elves are fine, Ents are not.

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Niether are Hobbits.

stina

or tribbles. :)

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Yep.

stina

thanks. this has been extremely helpful.

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The main things to remember are:

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1: You don't need to tell the editor everything!

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2. You DO need to tell the whole plot.

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3: (and most important) Make it exciting to read!

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And that's it. If the agent or editor reads it, then picks up your chapters and reads them all the way through...

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you'll get a letter asking for the ms.

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It is NOT a guarantee of purchase, but it does mean that he/she thinks it's potentially saleable.

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Five pages unless the count is specified!

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If you moan to yourself that it just HAS to be longer...tough.

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Make it shorter, tighter, stronger.

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That will impress an editor much more than ten pages of excessive verbage..

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that suggests he/she will be spending a LOT of time trimming the flab from your pages! :-)

speckledorf

You make it sound so easy...just 1, 2, &3....sigh.

mary rosenblum

Welll...1, 2, 3 and polish. :-)

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actually, it IS easy, but here's a trick for you...

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I do a blurb/synopsis of every single story or novel I start working on.

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Right off the bat.

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I give myself one to two paragraphs for a short story and one to two pages for a novel...usually I just need one.

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Not only is it excellent practice at writing that synopsis or blurb...

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but it also forces you to really focus on what the story really IS about.

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I started doing this many years ago, back when I first started selling.

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It really helped pull stories together so that I did less major revision.

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And it gives you a clear vision of your dramatic arc in a novel length work...

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which makes it easier to keep your subplots coordinated to the shape of the novel as a whole.

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You don't want three subplots climaxing AFTER your main climax!

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It will help your writing in general if you start to do this...

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and then, when someone asks you, 'What is it about?" you won't flounder. :-)

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It is NOT easy to synopsize an entire book in a very few pages.

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Or a story in a paragraph or two.

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The more you do it, the better you get at it. Just like writing the story in the first place. :-)

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So don't wait until you NEED that synopsis or blurb. Write them now. Lots of them. Write them for books you've read.

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And remember: Present tense.

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No matter what tense you use in your book.

happybunny

Is sort of the same thing/idea as the "thirty second" pitch?

mary rosenblum

Yep, pretty much. You get more space. :-)

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I just checked to see how long the proposal was, that I sent off to the editor at Viking for my YA. It was one page, single spaced. It got her to ask for the novel.

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I tend to write very short synopses, but I've had a lot of practice doing it. :-)

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The synopses for my mysteries were more like 2 - 3 pages.

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Well, this has been a fun Oregon hour. ;-)

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I'll post this in the usual place:

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Writing Craft: Forum Transcripts.

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And I'll be posting an article on writing the synopsis sometime in the next few days.

writeaway

Mary thanks again for making what sounds difficult, something within my grasp.

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It really isn't difficult...it's just a new and different technique...

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so if you're trying it for the first time with your brand new novel...

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it can seem very daunting.

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That's why I suggest practicing with something like Wizard of Oz. :-)

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Do drop by the casual chat tomorrow morning.

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It's at 10 am Pacific, 11 Mt, 12 central, and 1 PM east coast time.

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It's just an open chat where we talk about whatever.

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Great place to 'unstick' stuck stories.

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Good brainstorming sessions there!

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Have a good evening all!

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See you on the website!

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Good night, all!

 

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